I think I am going to die. I glance up at the tree, gasp and shuffle back. I cannot do this. I am
scared. I cannot do this.
But I am next in line. That's when I begin to start climbing .I am shaking with nervous energy.
I think ‘I can do this’ but I really just want to go down now.
I look down and I see I am so far up. I cling to the blocks because I feel like I am going to fall. I have nerves creeping up my spine. I want to go higher, but I want to come down as well.
I climb higher. My face is chalky white. I stop. I reach out to the last block. I am scared that I am going to miss it and fall. I am pretty sure the boys aren't looking and they are going to let go of the rope and I will fall straight down. Then I will flop down on the stones, and that would hurt.
“I want to come down now,” I call out, so they pull me down slowly. When I tumble onto the tiny stones, I feel so relieved that I did it. I want to do it again! Millie and I were the only people that made it to the top.
In this writing I was trying to show the emotion, use punctuation and
Chunk my ideas into paragraphs to improve my writing.
I did well because I used emotional words like” My face is chalky white” in my story because it showed I was nervous. When I read it it was making sense..
My next step is to make more and more punctuation.