Tuesday, 16 February 2016

Where does my heart lie?

 Where does my heart lie?

Where the harakeke dances in the cold breeze,
A cloud shadowing over it.

Where the Kererū replies to his mother’s call, 
The tree shading its head.

Where the weka talks in the wind, 
The trees blowing their features away.

I feel happy at this place.

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I am learning to to use personification in my poem. I am going well because l have got many ideas, for example “Where the weka talks in the wind 
The trees blowing their features away”. My next step is to connect my ideas.

By Lily

9 comments:

  1. Wow Lily!
    That is on fantastic poem I just love it.
    I totally feel like I am in that place I can feel it.
    I like the bit when you say “ where the kererū replies
    to its mother's call I can connect to that because I usually
    reply to my mother to.
    Well done Lily that was a great post.

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  2. Great job lily. you are great at using personification. I really enjoyed the bit when you said were the harakeke dancers in the cold breeze .I really enjoyed your poem

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  3. Great gob love it please post more work on your blog

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  4. cool poem Lily! I'm impressed..

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  5. Love your peace of writing because I know that you put so much effort in it.

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  6. Cool poem lily. I like how you used lots of punctuation and how it makes me feel carm.
    Good work lily🙂

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  7. wow lily that is a great peace of work that you did i like how you said the trees blowing there features away.You must have put a lot of effort in to writing that poem.Nice job :) From Amy

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